autumn boardwalk
all that’s fallen
through the cracks

 

11 Responses

  1. Mark Dailey Says:

    Wonderful!

  2. Pravat Kumar Padhy Says:

    Lovely ku. Congratulations, Susan.

  3. Greg Says:

    Very nice! Great line separation.

  4. Susan Says:

    Thanks for the thumbs up, Pravat, Greg, and Mark. Glad you like this one.

  5. magyar Says:

    The positive so well seen, Susan. Nifty!
    … and that, that has fallen, can begin anew.
    _m

  6. MaryJo Says:

    Thanks, Susan. This works on many levels.

  7. Michelle Schaefer Says:

    And there it was in front of you the whole time…A haiku!

    Nicely done

  8. Susan Says:

    Many thanks for your positive comments, Mary Jo, MIchelle, and Magyar. I appreciate them all!

    Susan

  9. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Love the surprise of that last line, Susan! :)

    marion

  10. Alan Summers Says:

    Whenever I have been on a boardwalk, USA, Australia, or Britain, I've often wondered what has 'slipped' through. Does it all physically collect 'beneath' or into an alternative reality?

    .

    down the sidewalk
    an old vagrant
    daisies in his mouth

    Alan Summers
    Publication credits: Hobo (Tasmania, 1999); Issa's Untidy Hut (2011)

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  11. John Says:

    nice observation

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