Neat verse, and poignant. The word 'cut' reaches extra depth with the following phrase of the short shelf life of compliments, be it in a relationship, or in general.
Wonderful verse! And subtly powerful.
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such old steps
I water the sunflowers
for van Gogh
Alan Summers
Stardust Haiku Issue 9 – September 2017
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Your haiku brings our own transcience into play on many levels. And it's always good to be reminded of how short-lived our success or our failure when writing.
December 5th, 2017 at 10:22 am
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cut flowers
the short life
of compliments
—DEBBI ANTEBI
Neat verse, and poignant. The word 'cut' reaches extra depth with the following phrase of the short shelf life of compliments, be it in a relationship, or in general.
Wonderful verse! And subtly powerful.
.
such old steps
I water the sunflowers
for van Gogh
Alan Summers
Stardust Haiku Issue 9 – September 2017
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December 6th, 2017 at 11:28 am
Dear Alan,
Thank you for your valuble feedback. This poem came from a personal place, and I'm happy to see that it resonates with you and others.
Warm regards,
Debbi
December 5th, 2017 at 12:29 pm
Thank you to both you DEBBI (and to Alan.)
Your haiku brings our own transcience into play on many levels. And it's always good to be reminded of how short-lived our success or our failure when writing.
December 5th, 2017 at 3:13 pm
Nicely done. And so very true!
December 6th, 2017 at 11:19 am
Many thanks, Michelle.
December 10th, 2017 at 10:23 am
Even to a haiku newbie, as I am, it hits a homerun! Thanks for sharing.
December 11th, 2017 at 2:58 pm
You nailed it, Debbi! :)
marion
April 26th, 2018 at 9:22 pm
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