Rebecca Drouilhet is a retired registered nurse who writes haiku, tanka, essays, short stories and others. She is currently working on a novel and lives in Picayune, Mississippi with my husband. They have four grown sons and many grandchildren.
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codependent
a flaw
deep in the diamond
—REBECCA DROUILHET
Definitely an interesting juxtaposition. Reading up on diamonds they sound so unglamorous!
Diamond is a metastable allotrope of carbon…
The cutter has to decide which flaws are to be removed by the cutting and which could be kept.
The diamond can be split by a single, well calculated blow of a hammer to a pointed tool, which is quick, but risky. Alternatively, it can be cut with a diamond saw, which is a more reliable but tedious procedure. WIKIPEDIA
The pairing that is so often a feature of haiku works so well here!
Great!
__ Of course Rebecca, I may be accused of disrespect and ignorance in my response to your fine verse, but that is certainly not my intent. With a deep smile, my "juxtaposition" is a metaphoric view of that universal "diamond". Haiku / senryu; read by other eyes; the change. Smiles! _m
Rebecca-
This haiku arrived on my 75th birthday; the diamond one. Your verse is so incisive with such an economy of words! Thanks so much for this work.
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codependent
a flaw
deep in the diamond
—REBECCA DROUILHET
Definitely an interesting juxtaposition. Reading up on diamonds they sound so unglamorous!
Diamond is a metastable allotrope of carbon…
The cutter has to decide which flaws are to be removed by the cutting and which could be kept.
The diamond can be split by a single, well calculated blow of a hammer to a pointed tool, which is quick, but risky. Alternatively, it can be cut with a diamond saw, which is a more reliable but tedious procedure. WIKIPEDIA
The pairing that is so often a feature of haiku works so well here!
warm regards,
Alan
Or… a double play.
Great!
__ Of course Rebecca, I may be accused of disrespect and ignorance in my response to your fine verse, but that is certainly not my intent. With a deep smile, my "juxtaposition" is a metaphoric view of that universal "diamond". Haiku / senryu; read by other eyes; the change. Smiles! _m
Nicely done, Rebecca
Rebecca-
This haiku arrived on my 75th birthday; the diamond one. Your verse is so incisive with such an economy of words! Thanks so much for this work.
carol
This is lovely, Rebecca. Flawed and codependent as most things are.
Rebecca, I love your pairing of codependent and flawed. Well done!
Lovely, Rebecca.
Unusual use of words but so apt
but still, it is your diamond.
Wonderful haiku. This speaks to me of buried childhood wounds often at the heart of codependency. Really elegant and beautiful way of expressing it.