eye exam
in the dark he compliments
my retinas




(The Heron’s Nest, XVI:4, December 2014)

7 Responses

  1. Lynne Rees Says:

    I love this – sexy and funny!

  2. Annette Makino Says:

    Thanks Lynne! My optometrist is a very enthusiastic guy.

  3. Magyar Says:

    __ Nifty senryu, Annette; new glasses are >sometimes< an asset_! Smiles. _m

    new glasses
    conquer yesterday's blur
    wrinkled mirror

  4. Pravat Says:

    An interesting ku with intertextual metaphor. The haiku reveals an imagistic fusion of romance with science.

    withered flowers
    I gather with love and care
    closing my eyes
    in the garden of memories
    I dream the greatness of living

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    Publication Credits: Kokako 17 September, 2012

    ******* ******* *******

    We discover
    The agile ray of radiance,
    Playfully closing our eyes.
    Perhaps darkness
    Emits new streak of beam,
    In the world
    Of our divine dream.

    Pravat Kumar Padhy
    (From the book, "Songs of Love: A Celebration")
    ….. ….. …….

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Hahahahaha – a cheeky one, Annette!


  6. Justine Says:

    In the dark
    Lovely retinas
    He begins

  7. Anitha Varma Says:

    Funny… :)


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