neon motel sign —
concrete slab scoured
by desert wind
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Korie Beth Brown
Korie Beth Brown is a lifelong writer specializing in nonfiction and poetry. She has been published in tinywords, Lynx, Zuzu's Petals, the Poetry Website, and Gargoyle. More of her work can be seen at her websire: backyardpointsettias.wordpress.com
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An interesting poem depicting the interference of modernity and natural entity. Some of my haiku and tanka on 'desert' are as follows:
mourning
in lonely desert wind—
a widow tree
Sketchbook, Vol 6, No.1, Jan-Feb, 2011
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stretched desert
gentle shift of the shadow
of a lean branch
Simply Haiku, Summer 2011, Vol. 9, No.3&4
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desert marathon—
for a moment I look back
my footprints
Mainichi News, 7.11.20
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in long desert
breeze swings from
the crest to valley
I march with lonely shadow as
footprints fill the shifting sand
Mike– tinywords is not a workshop site. The comments here are for reactions and responses, preferably in the form of haiku, tanka, or other short poems. Please don't use this space for critiques.
As every page on this site says, below the comments: "We encourage readers to leave responses to the poems published on tinywords. We're especially excited about responses that take the form of your own haiku or short poems, but comments are also welcome, if they are short and polite."
Good job, Korie. Perfectly captures the metaphysical spirit of road trips and ghostly images of long-abandoned motels in the middle of nowhere. Love it!
An interesting poem depicting the interference of modernity and natural entity. Some of my haiku and tanka on 'desert' are as follows:
mourning
in lonely desert wind—
a widow tree
Sketchbook, Vol 6, No.1, Jan-Feb, 2011
*****
stretched desert
gentle shift of the shadow
of a lean branch
Simply Haiku, Summer 2011, Vol. 9, No.3&4
*****
desert marathon—
for a moment I look back
my footprints
Mainichi News, 7.11.20
*****
in long desert
breeze swings from
the crest to valley
I march with lonely shadow as
footprints fill the shifting sand
Chrysanthemum 12, October 2012
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Thank you for your comments on this website. They are always interesting to me. I am not a contributing poet, just a haiku fan.
Don’t need adjective ‘neon’;
most motels signs are that way.
afternoon waves~~~
the falling sun
shadows the sand
Mike– tinywords is not a workshop site. The comments here are for reactions and responses, preferably in the form of haiku, tanka, or other short poems. Please don't use this space for critiques.
As every page on this site says, below the comments: "We encourage readers to leave responses to the poems published on tinywords. We're especially excited about responses that take the form of your own haiku or short poems, but comments are also welcome, if they are short and polite."
Thank you for (repeatedly) making this comment. The negative critiques are not as interesting as the honest responses and poems.
I can so see this! And feel it. Wonderful!
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the wind eemoves
all signs
tornado alley
Like a shot from a Hitchcock film! The use of "scoured" is effective.
Good job, Korie. Perfectly captures the metaphysical spirit of road trips and ghostly images of long-abandoned motels in the middle of nowhere. Love it!
Terrific, immediately creates the transient atmosphere of a desert highway motel. Love it.
motel vacancy winking neon between dust storms
Transported me immediately to the scene…enjoyed this!