The first line is so gentle and then it takes a turn with “the need”, which is so important here. The poet could have simply said, “ I mouth the words”, but this inability to speak provides a real sense of helplessness in the face of grief. Also, the reader wonders what exactly the words are, creating tension.
Or perhaps this not about death at all but illicit love and the narrator is not permitted to express the words “I love you” aloud.
May 31st, 2018 at 9:53 am
Wonderful. So Kinesthetic.
May 31st, 2018 at 12:27 pm
Very poignant…!
Anitha.
June 1st, 2018 at 4:57 am
Beautiful and thoughtful ku.
old album–
the colourful life
in black and white
Pravat Kumar Padhy
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Daily Haiku: Charlotte Digregorio’s Writer's Blog
crossword puzzle
I rearrange words
in her nick name
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The Living Senryu Anthology, 2017
June 12th, 2018 at 12:44 am
The first line is so gentle and then it takes a turn with “the need”, which is so important here. The poet could have simply said, “ I mouth the words”, but this inability to speak provides a real sense of helplessness in the face of grief. Also, the reader wonders what exactly the words are, creating tension.
Or perhaps this not about death at all but illicit love and the narrator is not permitted to express the words “I love you” aloud.
The reader can imagine a narrative.
marion