early autumn
the deepening taste
of the well water


6 Responses

  1. Norman Darlington Says:

    Beautifully felt and expressed.

  2. Joy MacVane Says:

    Thank you. So kind of you to say.

  3. Dirk van Nouhuys Says:

    I like it as it is, but I also long for a more concrete word than “deepening” -; say ‘earthy’ or even ‘bitter’.

  4. Mel Gambutti Says:

    taste of
    fall water-
    the tannin of leaves

  5. texaspoetspodcast Says:

    Well done.

  6. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    I have never tasted water directly from a well as I've been too worried in case anything has fallen in there and died, so the 'deepening' taste made me shudder slightly, Joy! But that's just my reading and I'm sure others find something different in there…the haiku, that is – rather than the well! :)

    marion

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