just the fluted song
of a wood thrush
—Mary Jo Balistreri
Issue 19.1 | 17 April 2019
A most beautiful haiku! Everything works, from that opening line of 'within rain' and the ellipsis triple dots (of rain) to "just" which acts as a pivot amongst the musicality of the entire scene.
Call of the Page
fantastic poem. mesmerizing!
I agree!!! :-)
Beautiful – thank you
I agree! :-)
Beautiful, Jo! I love the word “fluted” to describe both the shape of the sound and its woodwind quality. And how the sounds of rain and the wood thrush fit together naturally and musically.
Agreed! It's 'just' right and so much more. It's a brilliant haiku and it does far more, and brightens my day each time I read it.
one word makes the difference
'just' so! Utterly beautiful haiku, and breathtakingly expansive. Thank you tinywords for adding this haiku!
Lovely haiku — in California we have hermit thrushes and you captured the beauty, transcendence
and lightness of the song coming through the rain!
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