within rain…
just the fluted song
of a wood thrush

11 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    A most beautiful haiku! Everything works, from that opening line of 'within rain' and the ellipsis triple dots (of rain) to "just" which acts as a pivot amongst the musicality of the entire scene.

    Alan Summers
    Call of the Page

  2. s. m. forrester Says:

    fantastic poem. mesmerizing!

  3. Alan Summers Says:

    I agree!!! :-)

  4. Ellen Grace Olinger Says:

    Beautiful – thank you

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    I agree! :-)

  6. Julie Warther Says:

    Beautiful, Jo! I love the word “fluted” to describe both the shape of the sound and its woodwind quality. And how the sounds of rain and the wood thrush fit together naturally and musically.

  7. Alan Summers Says:

    Agreed! It's 'just' right and so much more. It's a brilliant haiku and it does far more, and brightens my day each time I read it.

  8. Peter Newton Says:

    one word makes the difference

  9. Alan Summers Says:

    'just' so! Utterly beautiful haiku, and breathtakingly expansive. Thank you tinywords for adding this haiku!

  10. Bruce Feingold Says:

    Lovely haiku — in California we have hermit thrushes and you captured the beauty, transcendence
    and lightness of the song coming through the rain!

  11. Alan Summers Says:

    Yay!!!! :-)

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