summer street a boy rides a wheelie out of sight
(Originally appeared in Frogpond 42: 2)
—Mark Dailey
Issue 19.1 | 21 June 2019
That 'out of sight' really makes the haiku.
I've become a bit of a sucker for alliteration, so opening line and last line works running alongside that middle line.
Brilliant! . . down side streets – gulls turning the sky in and out
Alan Summers Haiku in English: The First Hundred Years ed. Jim Kacian, Allan Burns & Philip Rowland (W. W. Norton & Company 2013)
Thank you, Alan! And, I owe an apology to tinywords, as I have just realized I submitted this haiku to two places (who both chose to publish it). It was unintentional, and I apologize for my sloppy oversight.
Thanks Mark, and to Dylan, for rescuing my comment I posted several days ago.
I doubt there are many people who haven't innocently double submitted! :-)
Great to see it here, as well as at Frogpond, congratulations, and glad Dylan and his wonderful team of editors took it!
Alan Call of the Page
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June 20th, 2019 at 12:05 pm
That 'out of sight' really makes the haiku.
I've become a bit of a sucker for alliteration, so opening line and last line works running alongside that middle line.
Brilliant!
.
.
down side streets –
gulls turning the sky
in and out
Alan Summers
Haiku in English: The First Hundred Years
ed. Jim Kacian, Allan Burns & Philip Rowland
(W. W. Norton & Company 2013)
June 20th, 2019 at 12:36 pm
Thank you, Alan! And, I owe an apology to tinywords, as I have just realized I submitted this haiku to two places (who both chose to publish it). It was unintentional, and I apologize for my sloppy oversight.
June 21st, 2019 at 3:57 pm
Thanks Mark, and to Dylan, for rescuing my comment I posted several days ago.
I doubt there are many people who haven't innocently double submitted! :-)
Great to see it here, as well as at Frogpond, congratulations, and glad Dylan and his wonderful team of editors took it!
Alan
Call of the Page