summer street
a boy rides a wheelie
out of sight

 

 

(Originally appeared in Frogpond 42: 2)

 


3 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

    That 'out of sight' really makes the haiku.

    I've become a bit of a sucker for alliteration, so opening line and last line works running alongside that middle line.

    Brilliant!
    .
    .
    down side streets –
    gulls turning the sky
    in and out

    Alan Summers
    Haiku in English: The First Hundred Years
    ed. Jim Kacian, Allan Burns & Philip Rowland
    (W. W. Norton & Company 2013)

  2. Mark Dailey Says:

    Thank you, Alan! And, I owe an apology to tinywords, as I have just realized I submitted this haiku to two places (who both chose to publish it). It was unintentional, and I apologize for my sloppy oversight.

  3. Alan Summers Says:

    Thanks Mark, and to Dylan, for rescuing my comment I posted several days ago.

    I doubt there are many people who haven't innocently double submitted! :-)

    Great to see it here, as well as at Frogpond, congratulations, and glad Dylan and his wonderful team of editors took it!

    Alan
    Call of the Page

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