What a beautiful image, light as water falling as if from a tap, rinsing the father’s face. An image so strong I can hear the light falling as if water splashing in the sink.
falling light
rinses over his face…
father at the sink
—MARY JO BALISTRERI
This is very much like a painting with incredible tones, shade and light. I feel it's materialised in front of me as if I'm at an art gallery.
I love the phrase 'falling light' which reminds me of falling snow, and how in that falling the world is adjusted second by second if we could but see it in its microscopic majesty.
A great choice of verb, and a still life artwork comes to life, thank you for this remarkable haiku.
January 27th, 2020 at 8:31 am
ocean waves~~~
as the falling sun
shadows the sand
January 27th, 2020 at 10:13 am
Thanks, Mike.
January 27th, 2020 at 10:33 am
What a beautiful image, light as water falling as if from a tap, rinsing the father’s face. An image so strong I can hear the light falling as if water splashing in the sink.
January 27th, 2020 at 10:34 am
Thanks so much Art.
January 27th, 2020 at 10:43 am
Provocative imagery Jo!
Thank you,
Michael
January 27th, 2020 at 3:14 pm
Thank you Michael and Wilda.
January 27th, 2020 at 12:25 pm
The image of light rinsing over the father's face is exquisite!
January 27th, 2020 at 4:28 pm
An emotive poem, Jo; conjures fond memories of dinner with this son’s newly widowed father.
January 27th, 2020 at 4:36 pm
Jo, yours is a haiku of love and intuition, reminding me of visiting my dad many years ago
our aged father
gaunt from cancer
calls us his girls
January 27th, 2020 at 5:26 pm
Jo, I love the way you?ve used rinses with father being at toe sink. Such little things make it.
January 27th, 2020 at 6:25 pm
Thank you to everyone who wrote. It's wonderful to hear from you.
February 2nd, 2020 at 2:46 am
falling light
rinses over his face…
father at the sink
—MARY JO BALISTRERI
This is very much like a painting with incredible tones, shade and light. I feel it's materialised in front of me as if I'm at an art gallery.
I love the phrase 'falling light' which reminds me of falling snow, and how in that falling the world is adjusted second by second if we could but see it in its microscopic majesty.
A great choice of verb, and a still life artwork comes to life, thank you for this remarkable haiku.
warmest regards,
Alan
February 7th, 2020 at 7:06 pm
Thank you Alan for your generous response.
February 7th, 2020 at 7:06 pm
Thank you Alan for your generous response.