falling light
rinses over his face…
father at the sink

 


14 Responses

  1. Mike Schoenburg Says:

    ocean waves~~~
    as the falling sun
    shadows the sand

  2. MaryJo Says:

    Thanks, Mike.

  3. Art Elser Says:

    What a beautiful image, light as water falling as if from a tap, rinsing the father’s face. An image so strong I can hear the light falling as if water splashing in the sink.

  4. MaryJo Says:

    Thanks so much Art.

  5. Michael Escoubas Says:

    Provocative imagery Jo!
    Thank you,
    Michael

  6. MaryJo Says:

    Thank you Michael and Wilda.

  7. Wilda Morris Says:

    The image of light rinsing over the father's face is exquisite!

  8. Phil Allen Says:

    An emotive poem, Jo; conjures fond memories of dinner with this son’s newly widowed father.

  9. Barbara Robinette Says:

    Jo, yours is a haiku of love and intuition, reminding me of visiting my dad many years ago

    our aged father
    gaunt from cancer
    calls us his girls

  10. Patricia Goodman Says:

    Jo, I love the way you’ve used rinses with father being at toe sink. Such little things make it.

  11. MaryJo Says:

    Thank you to everyone who wrote. It's wonderful to hear from you.

  12. Alan Summers Says:

    falling light
    rinses over his face…
    father at the sink

    —MARY JO BALISTRERI

    This is very much like a painting with incredible tones, shade and light. I feel it's materialised in front of me as if I'm at an art gallery.

    I love the phrase 'falling light' which reminds me of falling snow, and how in that falling the world is adjusted second by second if we could but see it in its microscopic majesty.

    A great choice of verb, and a still life artwork comes to life, thank you for this remarkable haiku.

    warmest regards,
    Alan

  13. Jo alistreri Says:

    Thank you Alan for your generous response.

  14. Jo Balistreri Says:

    Thank you Alan for your generous response.

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