breaching the levee
river town
flooded with moonlight

5 Responses

  1. Janet Butler Says:

    One of the most evocative and lovely poems I’ve ever read. Exquisite image.

  2. Sheila Sondik Says:

    Lovely!

  3. David Smedley Says:

    I can see the moon rising above the barrier. My point of view of the town immediately went to "bird's eye".

    after all the mourners
    have left
    the scent of hawthorn

  4. haikuapprentice Says:

    Wow! Beautiful imagery David!
    Moon-watching was one of the 3 classic aesthetic experiences of classical Japan.
    You have captured and transformed your vision into an almost black-and white portrait of the scene. But there is such poignancy and poetry in this verse. How many are awake to the flooding light, and the blessing that is the levee. I really love this poem!

    Thank you for sharing it David.

    Strider

  5. Jane Williams Says:

    Gorgeous imagery and sense of presence, thank you.

    not yet lost to sleep I find myself awash in moonlight

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