deep summer moon
so smooth
this skipping stone

7 Responses

  1. David Gross Says:

    Very good poem Ben.

  2. Alan Summers Says:


    deep summer moon
    so smooth
    this skipping stone

    —BEN GAA

    Lovely opening line!

    I like the pivot line, it feels it's acting as a hinge for at least three things, not two, which is neat.


    the long long throw
    of a smoothly worn stone,
    dying, we live

    Alan Summers

    First published:
    Hedgerow #123 Spring (April) 2018 ed Caroline Skanne

    Anthology credit:
    All the Way Home: Aging in Haiku (2019) ed. Robert Epstein
    Middle Island Press (Oct. 2019)

  3. Alan Summers Says:

    Another unusual haiku with 'smooth' but coins not stones…

    smooth coins
    how we slip away
    into blue velvet

    Alan Summers
    The Haiku Foundation HAIKU DIALOGUE – a smooth coin
    ed. Craig Kittner (February 2019)

  4. Dan Bodah Says:

    Lovely poem! So many worlds together.

    Alan, I have a similar one:

    choosing flat stones

    to skip across the river

    beside the cemetery

    – Dan Bodah

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    Ah, yes!


  6. Bruce Feingold Says:

    Evocative and resonant and at this time of covid with these experiences not readily
    available right now, especially meaningful

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    As I read this, I see the narrator's gaze shift from the moon to a smooth, round stone he is holding and then to the reflection of the moon in water and finally back to the sky again. Perhaps he is thinking of the differences and similarities between the two; yes they are both round, but the moon is pocked with craters while the stone is smooth.

    "deep summer moon" suggests complete immersion in nature, time and space as the narrator reflects on how all things are connected…or perhaps this is just too deep!

    An enjoyable haiku in any case. :-)


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