Joanne Morcom is a published poet and retired social worker who lives in Calgary, Alberta. She posts her poetry on her Facebook and on X, formerly known as Twitter.
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Japanese haikai verses, such as hokku, and later in the 19th Century as haiku, often have a 5-on 7-on 5-on sound count, a bit like our morae units. Even in Japan sometimes the natural rhythm of 17-on via 5, 7, 5 is not there on paper but said in verbally to squeeze into that pattern.
Non-Japanese haikai writers often write haiku to capture the length of the shortness by writing less. I love writing both 'free verse' haiku, but only in English, and 575 haiku, but again only in English where our syllables are often much longer.
Two short non-575 Japanese language haiku:
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— ????
Coughing, even:
alone
Hosai Ozaki (1885-1926)
Here we have an even shorter haiku:
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haiku by ?hashi Raboku (1890-1933) at 4 Japanese characters.
The Japanese break more haiku rules than the West! :-)
warmest regards,
Alan
Alan Summers
co-founder, Call of the Page
President, United Haiku and Tanka Society
Love it… clever!
Corona
the new remedy
for excuses
Write a haiku for "Songs of the Pandemic" (e-book coming January 2021)
==> http://dandana.us/fivepalms/index.html#pandemic20…
Yes very clever and sadly true??? What a year !!
year 2020
looking through her lens
a vision of pandemia
Witty
Wow! Yes indeed . . .
expressive and concise
hiding behind walls
nervously waiting
-Coronavirus fears
pandemic lockdown
the drip of the night
Sounds nice. But is it Haiku out of the 5-7-5 format?I am wondering because I thought Haiku must maintain 17 syllables, thanks. I am still learning.
Dear Ronald Pagereski,
Japanese haikai verses, such as hokku, and later in the 19th Century as haiku, often have a 5-on 7-on 5-on sound count, a bit like our morae units. Even in Japan sometimes the natural rhythm of 17-on via 5, 7, 5 is not there on paper but said in verbally to squeeze into that pattern.
Non-Japanese haikai writers often write haiku to capture the length of the shortness by writing less. I love writing both 'free verse' haiku, but only in English, and 575 haiku, but again only in English where our syllables are often much longer.
Two short non-575 Japanese language haiku:
?????????
— ????
Coughing, even:
alone
Hosai Ozaki (1885-1926)
Here we have an even shorter haiku:
????
haiku by ?hashi Raboku (1890-1933) at 4 Japanese characters.
The Japanese break more haiku rules than the West! :-)
warmest regards,
Alan
Alan Summers
co-founder, Call of the Page
President, United Haiku and Tanka Society
Enjoyed JOANNE MORCOM’ HAIKU.
Poets argue about it. Here are some examples:
https://davidfshultz.com/2017/12/17/5-7-5-haiku-f…
http://www.graceguts.com/further-reading/forms-in…
https://www.tempslibres.org/tl/en/theo/mode04.htm…
https://www.gendaihaiku.com/research/metrics/haik…
have fun!
With mine not, but then again…
Call it a martin:
exploding sunlight
chrysanthemum
Thank you for your feedback!
Wonderful and a perfect summary of 2020!