porch lights a trombone slides into the night
—June Rose Dowis
Issue 20.2 | 19 January 2021
So nice! This is so very evocative! kudos!
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—JUNE ROSE DOWIS
First of all, wow! A great "aural visual" of sound and image combined. This is packed with atmosphere.
I love that para-rhyme of 'lights' and 'slides' when I read the full haiku, great effect!
And of course the assonance of the letters "i" add a genius touch too!
One I would have nabbed in minutes for the Blo?o Outlier Journal. :-)
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porch side mountains the wind-pushed snow all around us
Alan Summers Asahi Shimbun (December 2019, Japan)
Thank you so much Alan and Peggy for your kind words. June
No worries! :-)
Alan
I love hearing instruments practicing in the neighborhood, it really does lend a nice soundtrack to the natural world turning.
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January 19th, 2021 at 8:57 am
So nice! This is so very evocative! kudos!
January 19th, 2021 at 9:06 am
re:
porch lights
a trombone slides
into the night
—JUNE ROSE DOWIS
First of all, wow! A great "aural visual" of sound and image combined. This is packed with atmosphere.
I love that para-rhyme of 'lights' and 'slides' when I read the full haiku, great effect!
And of course the assonance of the letters "i" add a genius touch too!
One I would have nabbed in minutes for the Blo?o Outlier Journal. :-)
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porch side mountains
the wind-pushed snow
all around us
Alan Summers
Asahi Shimbun (December 2019, Japan)
January 21st, 2021 at 7:21 pm
Thank you so much Alan and Peggy for your kind words. June
January 22nd, 2021 at 2:34 am
No worries! :-)
Alan
January 22nd, 2021 at 7:52 am
I love hearing instruments practicing in the neighborhood, it really does lend a nice soundtrack to the natural world turning.