all that’s left in the bait bucket – a pelican’s breath
—Kathryn J. Stevens
Issue 22.1 | 18 May 2022
A nod to Matsuo BashÅ, of course. and a wonderfully "sensory" haiku!
Also love the consonance of the b's!
bravissimo!!!
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flowering bull nettles all that meditation in the cat’s back
Alan Summers Presence #46 2012 ed. Martin Lucas (early Summer kigo)
a little blue dust on the mantelpiece all that’s left
Alan Summers Haiku Scout Report #2 (May 2015)
Kathryn, loved this when I read it on Inkstone. Love it still. I agree with Alan, that it's a terrific sensory poem.
all legs squeek as the pelican stretches grazing over load
__Necessary to "re-fit" … strides above those over loads.
the bucket’s wetness, the smell of the bait and the warmth of the pelican’s breath make a wonderful mix to reveal a natural story. Loved it! * in the length of a breath shooting star
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May 18th, 2022 at 8:57 am
all that’s left
in the bait bucket –
a pelican’s breath
—Kathryn J. Stevens
A nod to Matsuo BashÅ, of course. and a wonderfully "sensory" haiku!
Also love the consonance of the b's!
bravissimo!!!
*
flowering bull nettles
all that meditation
in the cat’s back
Alan Summers
Presence #46 2012 ed. Martin Lucas
(early Summer kigo)
*
a little blue dust
on the mantelpiece
all that’s left
Alan Summers
Haiku Scout Report #2 (May 2015)
May 18th, 2022 at 9:26 am
Kathryn, loved this when I read it on Inkstone. Love it still. I agree with Alan, that it's a terrific sensory poem.
May 19th, 2022 at 8:04 am
all legs squeek
as the pelican stretches
grazing over load
__Necessary to "re-fit" … strides above those over loads.
May 29th, 2022 at 1:54 pm
the bucket’s wetness, the smell of the bait and the warmth of the pelican’s breath make a wonderful mix to reveal a natural story. Loved it!
*
in the length of a breath shooting star