a hot date
the gentle creaking
of moored boats

 

 

 

(Originally published in Frogpond vol. 43:3 (fall) 2020).

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Marta Chocilowska

Marta Chocilowska lives in Warsaw, Poland. She is a fan of cats, music, poetry and cycling. In 2013 she joined the Warsaw Haiku School-Kuzu. Her haiku have appeared in The Asahi Shimbun (Asahi Haikuist Network), Faces and Places Haiku Anthology, A Hundred Gourds, Brass Bell, Cattails, Chrysanthemum, Haiku Anthology of the 2nd International Haiku Conference, Cracow, 2015, IRIS International Haiku Magazine, KUZU, Whirligig, Wild Plum and WHA Haiga Contest.

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  1. I love the interplay of juxtaposition, from hot date (various levels) to gentle and creaking of nearby boats. The poem gives and gives and gives.

    warm regards,
    Alan

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    1. re:

      a hot date
      the gentle creaking
      of moored boats

      —Marta Chocilowska
      (Originally published in Frogpond vol. 43:3 (fall) 2020)

      I can imagine that a hot date developed into physical passion, perhaps hidden by trees, bushes, etc… close enough to a river where boats are moored, and can be heard in the near distance.

      Are the two parts of the haiku in the same timeline?

      Is this a poem of reminiscence? Perhaps the author was nervous and listening out to sounds in the early stages of their passion, worried about someone or a group stumbling upon them. Perhaps things appeared safe and private and the only noise for a while was the gentle creaking of boats in the near distance, and nothing else, and then the passion fully took over.

      Of course post-passion, the author might be more attuned to background noise.

      I don't get that that the people were actually in a boat, but close by, near a riverbank perhaps.

      warm regards,
      Alan

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