soft light rings the mouth of a vase spring rain
—Meredith Ackroyd
Issue 23.1 | 22 March 2023
Beautiful haiku. Wonderful use of the senses and sabi <3
I love how 'rings' creates a visual image and a sense of sound. Lovely unifying rhyme between rings/spring too.
eye and ear time each rain drop nature rhythm
__Counting letters. __We see, then hear… each drop on crystal; so nicely sensed, Meredith_! _m
Thank you so much for all of your kind and thoughtful comments on this poem!
Name (required)
Mail (will not be published) (required)
Website
Δ
March 22nd, 2023 at 9:04 am
Beautiful haiku. Wonderful use of the senses and sabi <3
March 22nd, 2023 at 9:32 am
I love how 'rings' creates a visual image and a sense of sound. Lovely unifying rhyme between rings/spring too.
March 22nd, 2023 at 1:55 pm
eye and ear
time each rain drop
nature rhythm
__Counting letters.
__We see, then hear… each drop on crystal; so nicely sensed, Meredith_! _m
March 23rd, 2023 at 10:04 am
Thank you so much for all of your kind and thoughtful comments on this poem!