big sky a snag on the river leaving no scar
—Jeffrey Ferrara
Issue 22.1 | 14 July 2022
Love the expansiveness of the first line and using the "narrowing down" technique to a final 'leaving no scar'. Sublime.
warm regards, Alan
Fantastic poem, Jeffrey!
And Thank you for sharing your review on this haiku, Alan. It enriches my perspective.
Thanks Elisa,
The narrowing down or zoom effect (which Jane Reichhold talked about) can be brilliantly effective as in Jeffrey Ferrara's haiku.
warm regards, Alan editor, The Haiku Reader anthology
silent rivers dam fallen rush turns loud and vast sense-filled images
__As we see and hear… we imagine.
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July 15th, 2022 at 5:13 am
Love the expansiveness of the first line and using the "narrowing down" technique to a final 'leaving no scar'. Sublime.
warm regards,
Alan
July 15th, 2022 at 5:32 am
Fantastic poem, Jeffrey!
And Thank you for sharing your review on this haiku, Alan. It enriches my perspective.
July 15th, 2022 at 5:40 am
Thanks Elisa,
The narrowing down or zoom effect (which Jane Reichhold talked about) can be brilliantly effective as in Jeffrey Ferrara's haiku.
warm regards,
Alan
editor, The Haiku Reader anthology
July 15th, 2022 at 7:43 am
silent rivers dam
fallen rush turns loud and vast
sense-filled images
__As we see and hear… we imagine.