planting delphiniums
in dark soil —
the taste of rain water
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Sandra Simpson
Sandra Simpson has been the editor of Haiku NewZ since its inception in 2005. She is also a Red Moon Anthology nominating editor and blogs about haiku at her site breathaiku.wordpress.com. She lives in Tauranga, New Zealand and intends (soon, honestly) to gather a second collection of her work.
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Great middle line that makes the first and last lines fill with resonance beyond the grouping of the words.
Such a potent evocation of a gardener planting out the seedlings during a shower – and what a wonderful way to render the sensual experience of a rain shower – visually in the colour of the soil, and by its taste. It is almost as if we are sharing the sensation of what it is like to be a seedling ourselves! The poet is totally immersed and connected to her garden and to nature.
I also particularly like how you have inverted the structure of the work. The shorter middle line surrounded by the longer than usual first and final lines gives a sense of the plant growing out of the poem, and the whole work becomes almost a visual representation of the fruitfulness and generativity of the plant's life cycle.
How good the rain water must taste to the flowers. Here in Wisconsin we've had a lot of rain, and last year's drought seems over. A later Spring – the robins returned a little over a week later than last year. The tiny snowdrops bloomed through ice and old leaves. Other flowers in the future . . .
Thanks, everyone for the kind words – and Strider for that marvellous commentary. I shall treasure it.
My delphiniums have succumbed to the change of season (a very long summer has finally changed to autumn) but I did get two flowerings by following the advice I got from the garden centre.
Great middle line that makes the first and last lines fill with resonance beyond the grouping of the words.
Alan
Marvelous poem Sandra!
Such a potent evocation of a gardener planting out the seedlings during a shower – and what a wonderful way to render the sensual experience of a rain shower – visually in the colour of the soil, and by its taste. It is almost as if we are sharing the sensation of what it is like to be a seedling ourselves! The poet is totally immersed and connected to her garden and to nature.
I also particularly like how you have inverted the structure of the work. The shorter middle line surrounded by the longer than usual first and final lines gives a sense of the plant growing out of the poem, and the whole work becomes almost a visual representation of the fruitfulness and generativity of the plant's life cycle.
Inspired and inspiring haiku!
Strider
A vivid synesthetic poem, redolent of spring.
Cold sprinkler drops on toes
California spring.
How good the rain water must taste to the flowers. Here in Wisconsin we've had a lot of rain, and last year's drought seems over. A later Spring – the robins returned a little over a week later than last year. The tiny snowdrops bloomed through ice and old leaves. Other flowers in the future . . .
Thanks, everyone for the kind words – and Strider for that marvellous commentary. I shall treasure it.
My delphiniums have succumbed to the change of season (a very long summer has finally changed to autumn) but I did get two flowerings by following the advice I got from the garden centre.
Thanks too, for taking the time to comment.
Whoops, sorry, that post was from me, Sandra. (Not sure where that odd ID has come from …)
Beautiful! I love gardening in light rain.
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