Our stories are often only available to share before change alters the moment. And if we do not see through the mist to the story when the opportunity presents itself, it does often evaporate and disappear. Thank you for reminding me of the importance of sharing stories and hearing hearts as they speak. These stories make us bigger and wider and deeper in the sharing! Turning back is seldom possible; for even the turning back is a new beginning.
Congratulations Jenny, and thank you for sharing this with us.
It was literally quite a shock to me to read a tanka after so many weeks of shorter form haiku. Rather than capturing an experience, I was struck by how much more story-like the 5-line poem is, and how it offers a different set of opportunities for raising and exploring situations and thoughts. And this is a perfect example.
Across the 5 unpunctuated lines, there are so many ways of reading this, so much to ponder and muse. I am so glad Tinywords gave us the weekend to ponder it over!
May 2nd, 2014 at 12:52 pm
Lovely poem.
family restaurant
we know each other
by our smiles
May 2nd, 2014 at 1:12 pm
Our stories are often only available to share before change alters the moment. And if we do not see through the mist to the story when the opportunity presents itself, it does often evaporate and disappear. Thank you for reminding me of the importance of sharing stories and hearing hearts as they speak. These stories make us bigger and wider and deeper in the sharing! Turning back is seldom possible; for even the turning back is a new beginning.
May 2nd, 2014 at 1:27 pm
A striking reminder for this reader to 'seize the day'. Very nice.
marion
May 2nd, 2014 at 2:12 pm
Spooky. Life is full of mystery and you remind us here!
May 3rd, 2014 at 11:18 am
Thanks, everyone, for reading, and for your thoughtful comments!
–jenny
May 4th, 2014 at 6:02 am
Congratulations Jenny, and thank you for sharing this with us.
It was literally quite a shock to me to read a tanka after so many weeks of shorter form haiku. Rather than capturing an experience, I was struck by how much more story-like the 5-line poem is, and how it offers a different set of opportunities for raising and exploring situations and thoughts. And this is a perfect example.
Across the 5 unpunctuated lines, there are so many ways of reading this, so much to ponder and muse. I am so glad Tinywords gave us the weekend to ponder it over!
Thanks again Jenny, for a really great poem.
Strider
May 4th, 2014 at 12:17 pm
Lovely vision. I'll remember it for a long time. Thank you.
May 5th, 2014 at 8:03 am
Love the layers in this tightly written tanka – and so relatable. Wonderful.
May 5th, 2014 at 2:38 pm
Dear Jenny,
I enjoyed your tanka very much, and loved 'rain-drenched road'
warm regards,
Alan
May 7th, 2014 at 1:25 pm
Most poignant, Jenny. Your L5 is unforgettable and well placed.
_kala