the slow reentry
after a week’s vacation
travel clothes
still neatly folded
inside our suitcases


12 Responses

  1. Norman Darlington Says:

    Cute. Though any time I’ve returned from hols my clothes have certainly not been “neatly folded” in my suitcase!

  2. Alan Summers Says:

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    Hi Janet,
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    An interesting modern tanka. I tend to neatly fold the vacation clothes I've worn, but make sure they are separate from any clean folded clothes I didn't get round to wearing.
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    I get a subtle poignancy from your poem, though it needn't be sad, it's just an underlying tone.
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    I've greatly enjoyed your tanka, thanks!
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    When I was a renga poet-in-residence in a city far away from home, I wrote this tanka:
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    a cat picking
    at discarded fast food
    this night without you
    filling with the hum
    of regular rain

    Alan Summers
    Bright Stars: An Organic Tanka Journal, Vol 1 (2014)
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  3. Magyar Says:

    Finding my lost sox hiding the folded slacks?

  4. janetld Says:

    Thanks for the posts, Norman, Alan, and Magyar. Since I share suitcases with a relatively "neat" traveler, I've finally learned to keep my clothes folded. Ah, the discovery that you can cram more in that way! Also, a couple of items inevitably never get worn and, so, never get unfolded. (But yes, the dirty clothes are separate from the undirty ones, though in the end I typically end up dumping everything into the washing machine regardless. How important it is to talk about these things, ha!)

    Thanks for noticing the "underlying tone," Alan, and for posting your thought-provoking Bright Stars poem.

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    Thanks for the exposition Janet, wonderful to hear from the author. :-)

    Yes, subtle undertones of both poignancy and a self-depreciating humour.

    Thanks for liking my tanka too. :-)

    warmest regards,

    Alan

  6. Alison Hedlund Says:

    I see those clothes as being the "ghosts" or memories of your travels that you are reluctant to let go of…. poignant. Enjoyed!

  7. Garry Eaton Says:

    The revelation that during vacation you have worn only a small amount of what you packed is very familiar to me. I’m now practicing an economy that any environmentalist would applaud. It’s called traveling light.

  8. janetld Says:

    Thank you for commenting, Alison and Garry. Yes, the "ghosts"!
    Traveling light is a good thing!

  9. Pravat Says:

    A beautiful tanka exploring images of day-to-day happenings. It explores with commonness in our life style. Nice to read.

  10. janetld Says:

    Thanks, Pravat and friv.

  11. th. vandergrau Says:

    A quiet poem that lingers in your mind …

  12. xnxx Says:

    A beautiful tanka exploring images of day-to-day happenings. I get a subtle poignancy from your poem, though it needn't be sad, it's just an underlying tone. Thanks for noticing the "underlying tone," Alan, and for posting your thought-provoking Bright Stars poem.

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