I love the subtle ambiguity I find in reading this verse Ellen. On one reading the poem is complete and self-explanatory. But taking it a line at a time there is a sense of openness and incompleteness that is very potent. Four seasons repeating through a 3-line haiku. Which season of life do we place ourself in? Great poetry, thanks Ellen.
I like this one a lot, Ellen. There is a sense of continuity in the first two lines, but this changes to frustration that we can't really change things in L3.
September 4th, 2015 at 12:45 pm
Explains a lot!
Thanks Grace
September 4th, 2015 at 3:41 pm
I love the subtle ambiguity I find in reading this verse Ellen. On one reading the poem is complete and self-explanatory. But taking it a line at a time there is a sense of openness and incompleteness that is very potent. Four seasons repeating through a 3-line haiku. Which season of life do we place ourself in? Great poetry, thanks Ellen.
Strider
September 4th, 2015 at 5:08 pm
we repeat what matters
winter spring summer fall
September 4th, 2015 at 5:48 pm
I love this haiku! Nicely done. You captured multiple dimensions, physical and metaphysical – expertly written. Thank you!
September 5th, 2015 at 4:43 am
Says it all. Great work.
September 5th, 2015 at 9:55 am
Grace, it is good to find your lovely poem here. I will carry it with me all day as a gift. o/
September 5th, 2015 at 2:26 pm
Thank you to tinywords, and for all your kind comments.
September 5th, 2015 at 4:33 pm
I loved this haiku from the first time I read it in Mayfly, so it was an extra gift to find it on Tinywords too.
September 8th, 2015 at 11:56 am
I like this one a lot, Ellen. There is a sense of continuity in the first two lines, but this changes to frustration that we can't really change things in L3.
marion
November 4th, 2015 at 8:35 pm
waiting for the summer again