There is a difference between what's part of history, followed by what happened in past, then followed by memories from past and further followed by the fact that "an establishment" connects and links to all.
With times things change. Old things now have to make a way for new things to come up.
"January" represents time, first month of the year, which is absolutely interesting because it can be any day of the month.
"Abandoned house" can also represent an establishment that has now become old with time.
Winds represent the fact that change is going to take place for sure.
Winds of change brought in sunshine and rain
Life will definitely proceed and progress.
Wonderful! A fine haiku with undertones of senryu.
It certainly resonates even after multiple readings. The use of enjambment, breaking/ending the first the line with 'into' really works, building the tension up.
May 19th, 2017 at 12:26 pm
Made me smile.
I read the first two lines and wondered who did it–how will it be a haiku and I
enjoyed the surprise of January wind.
May 19th, 2017 at 3:23 pm
I love the third line surprise, too.
May 20th, 2017 at 3:42 am
Gorgeous! I especially like the choice of January, perhaps being a new year wind it carries with it some hope for the abandoned house …
demolition site
everywhere slivers
of winter sun
May 20th, 2017 at 6:29 am
___ Or, from a different point of imagination, the homeless find shelter to that winter winded sleet and cold. _m
Homeless huddle; in this deserted house; broken glass.
May 20th, 2017 at 6:51 am
There is something beautifully accosting about this poem that leaves you cold. Very well done.
May 22nd, 2017 at 3:17 am
There is a difference between what's part of history, followed by what happened in past, then followed by memories from past and further followed by the fact that "an establishment" connects and links to all.
With times things change. Old things now have to make a way for new things to come up.
"January" represents time, first month of the year, which is absolutely interesting because it can be any day of the month.
"Abandoned house" can also represent an establishment that has now become old with time.
Winds represent the fact that change is going to take place for sure.
Winds of change brought in sunshine and rain
Life will definitely proceed and progress.
May 22nd, 2017 at 10:23 am
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breaking into
an abandoned house
January wind
—ROBERT NACZAS
Wonderful! A fine haiku with undertones of senryu.
It certainly resonates even after multiple readings. The use of enjambment, breaking/ending the first the line with 'into' really works, building the tension up.
Fine work!
warm regards,
Alan
President, United Haiku and Tanka Society
May 28th, 2017 at 12:53 am
January – what a thug! ?
Nicely done.
marion