Robert Naczas was born in Polish Subcarpathia in 1976. He's been writing haiku and other forms of poetry since early 90's and has published two haiku chapbooks (Breathless, 1999 and Trick of the Light, 2002). His haiku and senryu appeared in various haiku journals both online and offline worldwide. He's now living in Krosno, Poland with his wife and kids, working as an ESOL tutor.
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Made me smile.
I read the first two lines and wondered who did it–how will it be a haiku and I
enjoyed the surprise of January wind.
There is a difference between what's part of history, followed by what happened in past, then followed by memories from past and further followed by the fact that "an establishment" connects and links to all.
With times things change. Old things now have to make a way for new things to come up.
"January" represents time, first month of the year, which is absolutely interesting because it can be any day of the month.
"Abandoned house" can also represent an establishment that has now become old with time.
Winds represent the fact that change is going to take place for sure.
Winds of change brought in sunshine and rain
Life will definitely proceed and progress.
Wonderful! A fine haiku with undertones of senryu.
It certainly resonates even after multiple readings. The use of enjambment, breaking/ending the first the line with 'into' really works, building the tension up.
Made me smile.
I read the first two lines and wondered who did it–how will it be a haiku and I
enjoyed the surprise of January wind.
I love the third line surprise, too.
Gorgeous! I especially like the choice of January, perhaps being a new year wind it carries with it some hope for the abandoned house …
demolition site
everywhere slivers
of winter sun
___ Or, from a different point of imagination, the homeless find shelter to that winter winded sleet and cold. _m
Homeless huddle; in this deserted house; broken glass.
There is something beautifully accosting about this poem that leaves you cold. Very well done.
There is a difference between what's part of history, followed by what happened in past, then followed by memories from past and further followed by the fact that "an establishment" connects and links to all.
With times things change. Old things now have to make a way for new things to come up.
"January" represents time, first month of the year, which is absolutely interesting because it can be any day of the month.
"Abandoned house" can also represent an establishment that has now become old with time.
Winds represent the fact that change is going to take place for sure.
Winds of change brought in sunshine and rain
Life will definitely proceed and progress.
.
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breaking into
an abandoned house
January wind
—ROBERT NACZAS
Wonderful! A fine haiku with undertones of senryu.
It certainly resonates even after multiple readings. The use of enjambment, breaking/ending the first the line with 'into' really works, building the tension up.
Fine work!
warm regards,
Alan
President, United Haiku and Tanka Society
January – what a thug! ?
Nicely done.
marion