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winter ridgeline
a long drawn-out conversation
with wind
—MARK DAILEY
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Just the context setting opening line speaks of tension and resonance. We have a subtle shape poem aspect with the long (for obvious reasons) middle line.
Wonderfully atmosphere, I almost feel I am there, eating wind, and "talking wind", and attempting conversations!
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midnight wind picks up the looking glass
Alan Summers
original version published:
Otoliths issue forty-four, part one ed. Mark Young
(May 2017) ISSN: 1833-6221
From “Not when she’s in Kansas” haiku sequence/haibun hybrid
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Best part of the winter poem is the element of "stretch", how it's use. The way it works as it works very well and of course there is a lot of depth in the way of telling things. The term "drawn-out" refers to giving emphasis to certain aspect of a conversation. Those are the important aspects of conversation. Absolutely interesting.
June 12th, 2017 at 8:47 am
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winter ridgeline
a long drawn-out conversation
with wind
—MARK DAILEY
.
Just the context setting opening line speaks of tension and resonance. We have a subtle shape poem aspect with the long (for obvious reasons) middle line.
Wonderfully atmosphere, I almost feel I am there, eating wind, and "talking wind", and attempting conversations!
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midnight wind picks up the looking glass
Alan Summers
original version published:
Otoliths issue forty-four, part one ed. Mark Young
(May 2017) ISSN: 1833-6221
From “Not when she’s in Kansas” haiku sequence/haibun hybrid
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June 13th, 2017 at 2:51 am
Like your winter poem!
summer sky
pillows on blue
along the long trail~~~
June 13th, 2017 at 3:21 am
Reading this – a sensory experience, loved it …
wind tunnel the buildings swap tall tales
June 13th, 2017 at 3:45 am
Best part of the winter poem is the element of "stretch", how it's use. The way it works as it works very well and of course there is a lot of depth in the way of telling things. The term "drawn-out" refers to giving emphasis to certain aspect of a conversation. Those are the important aspects of conversation. Absolutely interesting.
June 14th, 2017 at 12:37 pm
Thanks to all for the kind and interesting feedback–And thanks to Jane, Alan, and MIke for sharing little poems from the same thematic grab-bag!
June 16th, 2017 at 3:41 am
Excellent poem