winter ridgeline
a long drawn-out conversation
with wind
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Mark Dailey
Mark Dailey is a Cultural Anthropology & Asian Studies professor. He rediscovered haiku in 2014, with publications in Modern Haiku, Frogpond, Heron's Nest, and Acorn. Mark lives in Arizona after many years in rural Vermont.
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winter ridgeline
a long drawn-out conversation
with wind
—MARK DAILEY
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Just the context setting opening line speaks of tension and resonance. We have a subtle shape poem aspect with the long (for obvious reasons) middle line.
Wonderfully atmosphere, I almost feel I am there, eating wind, and "talking wind", and attempting conversations!
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midnight wind picks up the looking glass
Alan Summers
original version published:
Otoliths issue forty-four, part one ed. Mark Young
(May 2017) ISSN: 1833-6221
From “Not when she’s in Kansas” haiku sequence/haibun hybrid
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Best part of the winter poem is the element of "stretch", how it's use. The way it works as it works very well and of course there is a lot of depth in the way of telling things. The term "drawn-out" refers to giving emphasis to certain aspect of a conversation. Those are the important aspects of conversation. Absolutely interesting.
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winter ridgeline
a long drawn-out conversation
with wind
—MARK DAILEY
.
Just the context setting opening line speaks of tension and resonance. We have a subtle shape poem aspect with the long (for obvious reasons) middle line.
Wonderfully atmosphere, I almost feel I am there, eating wind, and "talking wind", and attempting conversations!
.
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midnight wind picks up the looking glass
Alan Summers
original version published:
Otoliths issue forty-four, part one ed. Mark Young
(May 2017) ISSN: 1833-6221
From “Not when she’s in Kansas” haiku sequence/haibun hybrid
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Like your winter poem!
summer sky
pillows on blue
along the long trail~~~
Reading this – a sensory experience, loved it …
wind tunnel the buildings swap tall tales
Best part of the winter poem is the element of "stretch", how it's use. The way it works as it works very well and of course there is a lot of depth in the way of telling things. The term "drawn-out" refers to giving emphasis to certain aspect of a conversation. Those are the important aspects of conversation. Absolutely interesting.
Thanks to all for the kind and interesting feedback–And thanks to Jane, Alan, and MIke for sharing little poems from the same thematic grab-bag!
Excellent poem