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I'm always a sucker for a poem that mentions dusk!
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dusk crawls across the field crickets
—MARY JO BALISTRERI
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Certain verbs can take away the power of a haiku, while others elevate them. Crawls is a great verb choice, and together with dusk, and I've seen it crawl, this is a great "movement" haiku!
July 31st, 2019 at 9:23 am
Oh, so lovely. And I can feel the heat of a summer evening in those cricket voices too.
July 31st, 2019 at 9:24 am
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I'm always a sucker for a poem that mentions dusk!
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dusk crawls across the field crickets
—MARY JO BALISTRERI
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Certain verbs can take away the power of a haiku, while others elevate them. Crawls is a great verb choice, and together with dusk, and I've seen it crawl, this is a great "movement" haiku!
Alan
August 6th, 2019 at 6:04 am
Me too, Alan!
I could almost see the dusk creeping over each stem of wheat.
marion
August 6th, 2019 at 7:05 am
:-)
July 31st, 2019 at 9:33 am
Excellent! Really enjoyed this.
July 31st, 2019 at 11:20 am
Nice!
Start of wakefulness …
Sound of darkness …
July 31st, 2019 at 12:52 pm
Thank you for your kind comments.
July 31st, 2019 at 1:48 pm
ocean waves
dusk falls
shadows the sand ??
August 29th, 2019 at 9:07 pm
So lovely!