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Hi Janet,
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An interesting modern tanka. I tend to neatly fold the vacation clothes I've worn, but make sure they are separate from any clean folded clothes I didn't get round to wearing.
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I get a subtle poignancy from your poem, though it needn't be sad, it's just an underlying tone.
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I've greatly enjoyed your tanka, thanks!
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When I was a renga poet-in-residence in a city far away from home, I wrote this tanka:
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a cat picking
at discarded fast food
this night without you
filling with the hum
of regular rain
Alan Summers
Bright Stars: An Organic Tanka Journal, Vol 1 (2014)
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The revelation that during vacation you have worn only a small amount of what you packed is very familiar to me. I’m now practicing an economy that any environmentalist would applaud. It’s called traveling light.
A beautiful tanka exploring images of day-to-day happenings. I get a subtle poignancy from your poem, though it needn't be sad, it's just an underlying tone. Thanks for noticing the "underlying tone," Alan, and for posting your thought-provoking Bright Stars poem.
March 25th, 2015 at 10:54 am
Cute. Though any time I’ve returned from hols my clothes have certainly not been “neatly folded” in my suitcase!
March 25th, 2015 at 11:07 am
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Hi Janet,
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An interesting modern tanka. I tend to neatly fold the vacation clothes I've worn, but make sure they are separate from any clean folded clothes I didn't get round to wearing.
.
I get a subtle poignancy from your poem, though it needn't be sad, it's just an underlying tone.
.
I've greatly enjoyed your tanka, thanks!
.
.
When I was a renga poet-in-residence in a city far away from home, I wrote this tanka:
.
a cat picking
at discarded fast food
this night without you
filling with the hum
of regular rain
Alan Summers
Bright Stars: An Organic Tanka Journal, Vol 1 (2014)
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.
March 25th, 2015 at 11:20 am
Finding my lost sox hiding the folded slacks?
March 25th, 2015 at 11:37 am
Thanks for the exposition Janet, wonderful to hear from the author. :-)
Yes, subtle undertones of both poignancy and a self-depreciating humour.
Thanks for liking my tanka too. :-)
warmest regards,
Alan
March 25th, 2015 at 12:36 pm
I see those clothes as being the "ghosts" or memories of your travels that you are reluctant to let go of…. poignant. Enjoyed!
March 25th, 2015 at 1:35 pm
The revelation that during vacation you have worn only a small amount of what you packed is very familiar to me. I’m now practicing an economy that any environmentalist would applaud. It’s called traveling light.
March 25th, 2015 at 8:31 pm
A beautiful tanka exploring images of day-to-day happenings. It explores with commonness in our life style. Nice to read.
April 5th, 2015 at 1:32 am
A quiet poem that lingers in your mind …
April 27th, 2015 at 8:25 am
A beautiful tanka exploring images of day-to-day happenings. I get a subtle poignancy from your poem, though it needn't be sad, it's just an underlying tone. Thanks for noticing the "underlying tone," Alan, and for posting your thought-provoking Bright Stars poem.